On 2009-07-01 04:53, vinsmagic wrote:
Wow Joey Koins with Hair lol
good to see you perform Joe, nice job
vinny

On 2009-07-03 13:12, cinemagician wrote:
You can do the manipulations very well I have no criticism to give you on that front. But, I would consider toning down the zaney/ melodramatic expressions.

Who is your character in this situation? Would you really act like that and why?

Performers often resort to this "zaney over the top style" in order to hide their lack of ability. This is not the case w/ you. You can do all of the stuff well. So I would tone down that character a bit.

Consider using your assistant more- why is she there? To hold the hat?

Consider at the very least some dramatic premise to add to the routine- are you for example, trying to impress her or "pick her up" during this sketch?

If so, I can imagine many moments of comedy and by-play that could evolve. Perhaps she is not initially interested or impressed by your abilities, and as the routine progresses she becomes less resistant OR- perhaps she trumps you with her own surprises and productions (these need not require heavy sleight of hand- a simple production of a gaffed giant fan or some spring bills might sufice)and a mini battle of sorts developes.

The production of the cane and pole are without context or motivation woulnt the production of two wine glasses and a toast followed by a bow be a lot better than the can and pole?

Overall you have the skills to make this much better- I would consider getting a director or coreographer's imput, tone down the cornyness and involve your assistant more.