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magic4children Regular user Cheshire UK 127 Posts |
After many days of little sleep I have finally finished my updated website. I have done my level best to address spelling and punctuation but a fresh pair of eyes would not go amiss. It’s not all finished as I still have video to add to the “about magician ken Kelly” page. I value your feedback.
http://www.magic4children.co.uk Ken |
Dynamike Eternal Order FullTimer 24148 Posts |
The yellow reference quotes are hard to read. People are not going to strain their eyes over that.
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Evan Jay New user 17 Posts |
I agree with Mike, even the yellow A and H letters in the top left corner for magic4children don't come through all that clearly. My young eyes can read it all fine but I would recommend going with a different color as well.
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The Great Zucchini Inner circle 1347 Posts |
Wow, Incredible job, I'm not blowing smoke either, I think this site is fantastic-tons of energy, great reaction shots, crowd shots(rock star type of pictures), just looks like a blast.
Mike is right though, in my opinion, the one thing I would change also is the light yellow text, it doesn't stand out, I'd use a more primary color=besides that, one of the best sites I've seen in my opinion. |
MichaelCGM Inner circle Oklahoma City 2286 Posts |
Great site, Ken. I just got in, so haven't read all of it, but I found just a few typos on your Terms page: Under Marquees (in the first paragraph) you left the "a" out of the word Marquee. Under the Payment section, it should be "accept," not "except." If I find any others, I'll let you know. Great, great site. Well done!
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Bill Hilly Elite user 449 Posts |
Ken, that is a great site. I rather suck at spelling and puncuation so I'm afraid I'm not much help there.
But the layout, colors, and energy are fantastic. I think I understand the yellow text. It goes along with your chosen color scheme. So before changing it to another color, I'd suggest just making it a bit darker, similar to the bottom shade of your graphics words. I'd say those many days of little sleep have paid off. You done good, now get some rest. |
Made to Measure Magic New user 22 Posts |
Hi Ken - great site.
Nice to see my table feature in some of the pictures. Dave. http://www.madetomeasuremagic.co.uk |
magic4children Regular user Cheshire UK 127 Posts |
Thank you all for your input. I have changed the comments colour to a deeper shade, thanks for pointing that out, I missed it completely. I have amended the typos, thanks Michael. I truly am grateful and all your suggestions will remain part of my site going forward. This forum really is a gem; where else could you get such constructive feedback. Thanks to all. Ken
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Dynamike Eternal Order FullTimer 24148 Posts |
" What can I say! Absolutely fantastic show. Ruby loved it and asked today if we could do it again next week!
The children just laughed and cheered all the way through . Thank you so much for a wonderful birthday show , the party was a big success and you were very helpful throughout." The X represents were the four extra spaces are. Each of the four extra spaces should be eliminated: "XWhat can I say! Absolutely fantastic show.X Ruby loved it and asked today if we could do it again next week! The children just laughed and cheered all the way throughX. Thank you so much for a wonderful birthday showX, the party was a big success and you were very helpful throughout." Posted: Aug 2, 2012 5:46pm "Magic 4 Children" page: Magic 4 Children founder and director Ken Kelly has over twenty five years’ experience both as an entertainer and as an entertainments manager for a leading internetional resort. You are assured outstanding customer service levelled with the assurance that every event, no matter how big or small, will receive Ken’s personal attention and project management. "international" and "leveled" are spelled wrong. |
Potty the Pirate Inner circle 4632 Posts |
Dynamike, according to my Webster's (American) dictionary, "levelled" and "leveled" are both correct spellings in the US. In the UK, I think "levelled" is the correct spelling.
However, I don't think it's a particularly appropriate word in the context. In facet, the whole sentence isn't very well worded: "You are assured outstanding customer service levelled with the assurance that every event, no matter how big or small, will receive Ken’s personal attention and project management." ...I would change to: "We aim to ensure outstanding customer service, and that every event, no matter how big or small, will receive...." etc. ;) |
Dynamike Eternal Order FullTimer 24148 Posts |
Good thinking Potty.
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magic4children Regular user Cheshire UK 127 Posts |
Thanks to Potty and Mike, changes have been made.
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gomerel Elite user 458 Posts |
Magic 4 Children provide top-quality childrens entertainers in Cheshire and surrounding areas. The company is based in Warrington in Cheshire and is directed by, multi award winning, magician Ken Kelly.
Seems like "provides" would be better, since it appears to be one organization. Or "Magic 4 Children performers provide". I'm in U.S. but to me multi award winning should not be set off by commas. Anyway, there is an extra space after "winning," I would put dashes in multi award winning. But again, I am in U.S. Just some pickiness. It is a great site. |
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