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Al Desmond
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Over the last few months I have been collecting props and writing scripts for my new 1 hour paranormal/bizarre "magik" show, and I would enjoy hearing from Café members with critiques and feedback about the routines. And if you find anything useful in these scripts (or the whole script) please feel free to "steal" them. But please, if you do decide to use any of the material, make sure you adapt it to your performing style and not try to do the routines verbatim.

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Here is the first draft of my back story to Lillian’s Diary, using the basic story as outlined in the instructions as my guide, but making major cuts to the length and trimming out some ideas and thoughts I didn’t need.

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Lillian’s Legacy (“Lillian’s Diary” Gemini Artifacts/Outlaw Effects)

Cornelius Hobbs closed the Mysterious Wonder Tour in 1919 and settled down in Hillsdale Ill. so he could fulfill a promise he made many years earlier to his wife… to raise a family. William Hobbs was born in October 1920, their first and only child. And at the same time across the street, destiny started her wheels turning when the Rose family welcomed little Lillian Rose.

William had a very happy childhood with his best friend Lillian right across the street. They would often spend time in her backyard skipping stones on the lake, exploring the shore line, writing poetry… or just talking.

(Take out the two framed pictures of Lillian and William, pass them around)

Years went by and Lillian and William grew closer and closer. Even at the age of twelve, the two families could see that their young, mature “Romeo and Juliette” were destined for each other. However, all of that changed on Saint Valentines Day in 1932.

William prepared a special day for Lillian… ice skates in one hand and a valentine in the other… and they headed out to the frozen lake behind Lillian’s house. They skated hand in hand, giggling, slipping and sliding on the ice but suddenly the ice started cracking all around them. Lillian dropped through the ice while still holding on to William. As their hands finally separated, he could see the terror on her face as she was pulled under the icy lake. When she finally sank into the darkness he knew his love would be gone forever.

(Take out the mass cards and pass them around for all to see)

A year later to that day William Hobbs vanished. The whole town amassed to look for William… but he was not to be found.

When the mourning was over and the confusion subsided, Cornelius decided it was time to pack up Williams belonging and store them in the basement. Among Williams toys, books and other trappings of youth Cornelius found a shoe box filled with small scraps of paper.

Scribbled on the papers were notes, jottings and poetry verses. And each one had a date, 365 different dates, 365 small pieces of paper. Evidently the papers were an unbound diary.

(Take out “Lillian’s Diary.”)

So on one cold November morning, he brought the papers to Trinity Press for its first and only printing. He typeset one hundred copies of the diary written by his son William as a keepsake for family and friends.

Inside it’s pages were the real secrets of Lillian’s legacy. (riffle the pages of the diary)


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This opening is much shorter than the back story in the instructions. And it also contains a number of key elements that explain the construction of the diary, and hints (poetry, notes, jottings) of what is to be found inside. I think this is a gentle way of putting the spectators on the general direction they need to go, without it ever seeming like you have been the one to guide them. The opening back story is their guide, you simply recounted it. From my version of the back story certain elements of the tale that will unfold while reading through the dairy may already be evident to some spectators. That’s fine, because as they go through the diary, the real secret and the reveal is how it all happened.

Input gladly excepted.

P.S. If you don't already have a "Lillian's Diary" you need to get one ASAP. It's probably the most mystery packed extended routine of mentalism or seance material on the market. If you're looking for a "one off," then don't buy this. If you're looking for 15 or more minutes of a psychic adventure... this is for you.
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Nicely done Al. I like it. A good back story must convey the necessary information without being overly verbose. And I agree with your take on LD.
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A little name drop,of Lillian's sister,would not hurt,either! IMO
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I really like this backstory, it ties everything together succinctly and sets the tone. Also, the published diary makes a bit more sense with this presentation (or at least it seems clearer to me).
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Excellent thinking Al. Thanks for sharing that!
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On 2012-10-03 11:08, Godzilla wrote:
A little name drop,of Lillian's sister,would not hurt,either! IMO


In my opinion mentioning L$&a clutters up the back story. If you have the diary, you already know about the long explanation of distributing the printed copies of the diary out to numerous mediums, L$&a studying the diary and trying to use her powers to make sense of some of the entries and so on and so on. I feel it's an unnecessary coda to the initial back story.

And besides... that's exactly what your spectators are about to do... disassemble the jumble of diary entries into a coherent story with a surprising ending. I really see no need to talk about too much in the introduction. And if you read the other scripts I have publish on the Café over the last few days, you will see that the act I am framing never goes into the L$&a world.

Just my opinion.
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Point taken !

She,is part of the Hobb's world...

I got a thing for,Sis! Smile
So,I always drop a little touch of her,into my backstory,when applicable.

I,do not own the L*ll*an D*ary. But,do own,Lil's Jewelry Box!

Gary
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On 2012-10-03 14:49, Godzilla wrote:
Point taken !

She,is part of the Hobb's world...

I got a thing for,Sis! Smile
So,I always drop a little touch of her,into my backstory,when applicable.

I,do not own the L*ll*an D*ary. But,do own,Lil's Jewelry Box!

Gary


You can see pcitures of Lillian and William here... http://www.themagiccafe.com/forums/viewt......um=221&6 they are about 8 years old in this picture... 4 years before the eventful day.
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I'm a little worried that people may just google Lilli*n di*ry and get to this page. Aside from the official website, this forum came out as the 6th hit when I google Lilli*n's di*ry. (spelled in full)
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On 2012-10-12 16:02, piyuyu wrote:
I'm a little worried that people may just google Lilli*n di*ry and get to this page. Aside from the official website, this forum came out as the 6th hit when I google Lilli*n's di*ry. (spelled in full)


Just personal opinion. I been doing magic and mentalism for about 40 years, I've been on the internet before it was the internet (look up DARPANET) when there were simply newsgroups, and I've been discussing magical effects on the networks for almost 30 years, and not once have I had anyone say they saw that on the internet, or read about it on some newsgroup, BBS, Compuserve or any other of the various incarnations of virtual groups.

As much as I try to respect the "rules" and conventions of a particular group, I really find some of these concerns rather anal. I'd be interested in hearing about actual incidents that happened to anyone while performing... "Hey... I know how you did that because I saw someone else doing it and I Goggled it... and then I went to Outlaw and purchased it."

Let me know!
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Well, perhaps its jus me worrying too much.

My students know me as a collector of old antique peculiar stuff. I recently acquired the diary and yesterday I was sharing with my students the back story and the origin of it. One of my student was really into this, and she asked whether more information abt this strange diary can be found online. Well, I told her that I had tried but the names are just too common to get exact information even if they exist.

So this struck me. At no instance have I even mention the word "Lili*n Di*ry" through out my sharing of the back story. But this is still a diary of Lilli*n. and we cant run away from it. So imagine that student of mine decided to go home to do a research more on this, typing key words on google. It hasnt happen but it could happen. And a logical keyword that she may type is Lilli*n di*ry.

This is all hypothetical of course.And I do remember spookyone mentioning his sister finding out that his phantoms was a product of outlaw.
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So then don't refer to it as a dairy. Refer to it as Lilli*n's journal or Lilli*n's Notebook. Use a thesaurus and pick wherever synonym fits best. Trust me if you use a word enough it will stick in people's head and that's what they'll type when they go to search it. Often when I'm talking about something with my friends they'll use almost my exact words when referring to that same thing again.
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That's a good idea! I believe I know my way of going around this. Thanks!
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No problem Smile
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Beautiful back story, and yes, you've solved the awkwardness of justifying a typeset diary in a most nature way. Thanks for sharing these with us, I enjoy reading your take on these routines.

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Al,
This is great. Much more concise, but revealing just enough clues (with just enough subtle repetition), to more likely set the sitters on their way to exploring the book. Thanks very much for sharing this.
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On 2012-10-13 12:49, TH1 wrote:
Al,
This is great. Much more concise, but revealing just enough clues (with just enough subtle repetition), to more likely set the sitters on their way to exploring the book. Thanks very much for sharing this.


My thoughts exactly. This is a great premise for the routine, thanks for sharing!
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On 2012-10-12 16:34, Al Desmond wrote:
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On 2012-10-12 16:02, piyuyu wrote:
I'm a little worried that people may just google Lilli*n di*ry and get to this page. Aside from the official website, this forum came out as the 6th hit when I google Lilli*n's di*ry. (spelled in full)


Just personal opinion. I been doing magic and mentalism for about 40 years, I've been on the internet before it was the internet (look up DARPANET) when there were simply newsgroups, and I've been discussing magical effects on the networks for almost 30 years, and not once have I had anyone say they saw that on the internet, or read about it on some newsgroup, BBS, Compuserve or any other of the various incarnations of virtual groups.

As much as I try to respect the "rules" and conventions of a particular group, I really find some of these concerns rather anal. I'd be interested in hearing about actual incidents that happened to anyone while performing... "Hey... I know how you did that because I saw someone else doing it and I Goggled it... and then I went to Outlaw and purchased it."

Let me know!

Nowadays with mobileinternet it's much more likely they Google it while you perform or shortly after your performance.
To be honest I think I would.
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